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 Adrianna's Secret  [GC]
Nathan and Adrianna take their relationship a step further.
by Prof Moriarty
Review of Adrianna's Secret  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose - REOPE...  
Rated: GC | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Adrianna has just come home from a business trip, knowing she's ovulating and keeps the information to herself. Nathan cannot get enough of his wife, and it shows in all he says and does. It's easy to see he adores his wife.

SETTING -
Good visuals of Adrianna as Nathan watched her combing her long hair, how he saw her and how just watching her made him excited.

CHARACTERS -
Adrianna has a high powered career and has decided it's the perfect time to get pregnant, knowing it's everything Nathan has been waiting for. Nathan seems content in their marriage, and genuinely wants what's best for his wife.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
“I’ve missed you, Adrianna,” he whispered, deriving immense comfort from the warmth of her body which percolated through the fabric of their clothes.

“Perhaps you still don’t know what of a kind husband I am.”

THINGS TO THINK ABOUT -
I liked the playful banter between your couple, and how he was concerned she could become pregnant if they didn't stop. Adrianna, of course, had it all planned out and was ready for this next step in their relationship. I love reading about strong women, and you have that kind of character with Adrianna. She knows what she wants and makes no qualms about going after it. Another good read with hot descriptions of the conjugal visits *Wink* Write on!

This would be my name.
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