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 the eyes of a child  [13+]
Let me see again just for a moment through the eyes of a child
by Moarzjasac
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Moarzjasac ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


*Castlegr* Why I chose to review this work: I was searching for something to review from your portfolio for WDC Game of Thrones war and this particular poem caught my attention. The title captivated me and I was intrigued to read what kind of a poem you had written here. The short description you had made the reader feel sad and powerless as well as a strong desire to be young again and look at things like a child, with innocence and less knowledge.

*Castleright* First Impression: It made me recall all the times when I wanted to be a child once again and be unaware of things, and experience painful events. You have quite a sad reality described here that makes the reader reminisce her past and how carefree it was to be a child, not have responsibilities, to face the cruel world and have sad, betrayed experiences. I could completely relate to your poem. The starting stanza was very interesting, the way you start with yourself sitting near the school, looking at the children and comparing his life to the ones of a child and obviously, all of us feel at least once in our lives to be a child once again.

*Castlegr* Imagery and Vocabulary: The vocabulary in your poem was quite strong and vivid, it had a lot of emotions of regret, sadness and the wanting a second chance. On the other hand, the reader felt happy seeing the kids of the future, as I pray with the poet that they become better humans and end the violence, the dark world we are living in.

*Castleright* Favourite Lines: My favourite stanza was the opening stanza, it was very interesting and had the reader's attention. I could also imagine that very clearly as well as relate to it on a personal level.

*Castle* Final Thoughts: A very nice poem indeed!

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