Hi Moarzjasac ,

A "Game of Thrones"  House Martell Review!

Title:

I was hunting around for a second item to review, and this title drew me in. It holds a lot of possibilities as to what it could mean.

First impression:

Your short story delivers the promise of your title, but in a very a subtle way. There is nothing in it that screams out to the reader or grabs by the collar and drags you to the conclusion. Instead, it whispers of deeds and unhappiness, and winks and nudges at possibilities.

General impressions:

This flash piece does a nice job of reeling the reader in. You need to really concentrate to pick up on the subtleties. A lot of flash fiction, especially when it's this short, is very in your face with action, or it's blunt and straight to the point.

Your story hints at a very unhappy woman. We are left to fill in the gaps as to the reasons for her unhappiness, but this allows the reader's imagination to take flight - the reasons for her unhappiness are as varied as your readers.

Favourite part:

The ending. The way you finish the story leaves the reader wanting more, and wondering just what will happen.

Closing remarks:

You have a nice varied port, and I have enjoyed trawling through it this evening looking for items to review.

Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On!


Lord Andy~Sunspear of Martell




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .