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Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, OOT™ ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


*Castlegr* Why I chose to review this work: During my last visit to your portfolio, I saw a lot of poems and stories had explored the positive emotions, the good endings, full of hope and freshness but I am enjoying seeing the dark side as well. The last poem I read was dark, painful too, in its way, and so is this one. I chose to read and review this because of the touching title of your poem and the short description you had provided to the reader. I wanted to know more about why the person left and how is the poet feeling now.

*Castleright* First Impression: I was extremely surprised when I read the last two lines, the reader was certainly not expecting that and it left the reader shocked and stunned for a minute before she understood what had happened and felt bad, sympathetic towards the poet. Usually in these kind of poems, the boy leaves because he had found someone better or due to one reason or the other, he couldn't be with the poet but as I mentioned above, you took the reader by surprise. I really liked this element of surprise.

*Castlegr* Imagery and Vocabulary: The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption and your poem flew out smoothly when I read it out loud. The rhythm of your poem was good and it was enhanced by the presence of your consistent rhyming scheme throughout the poem. The vocabulary you used in your poem was strong, it was very effective in making the reader feel sad as well as angry against the boy who left you. However, it was soon discovered that he left because of something you had done which made it difficult for the reader to blame someone because you have realised your mistake and you want to atone for it and yet you can no longer.

*Castleright* Favourite Lines: The second stanza is the one I loved the most from your poem. I also liked the last two lines where you demonstrate a very common quality of us humans that we take everything for granted and it is only when we don't have that thing or person any longer that we actually realise its/his/her worth and understand their importance and roles in our lives.

*Castle* Final Thoughts: A very touching poem with a shocking surprise and confession in the end.

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