There is still not a lot of background going on. I read this as a continuation to the prologue I just finished. Honestly, I am thoroughly confused still. It's like reading pieces of a whole story that I don't have. It's a good story don't get me wrong. I just don't get it.
Considering this is a first draft I will take into account that you might have fixed the mistakes I have found. All of them are grammatic except one. Going from beginning to end.
"Derek, Jakes high school nemesis..." apostrophe Jake's shows possession.
"Jake groaned..." The quotations need to be removed. Jake groaned is not being spoken.
"Derek's twin sister slandered..." slandered? I do not understand slandered over? maybe sauntered, describing how she is walking since she is not with her brother. I know that slandered is describing someone talking, in this case she is joining the conversation from far away, logically she had to walk in.
"The bullies blocked every escape root as they formed a circle..." root is describing a plant. Route is direction. They can sound the same.
A question in this story. Why is Jade called freak and ape boy? What do the bullies know that Jake does not know? Why does Jake not know or act like he knows what they are talking about?
I enjoyed this story. I hope I was more help than a hindrance. Thank you for sharing and keep writing.