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Review #4240078
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 A moment of your time?  [E]
A one act, one person play to be performed at a talent show. Approx. 700 words
by Jordan.C.Fox
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love the sentiment of the road less traveled in this piece and the nod to Robert Frost. Also, I loved the thread of reflection on operating with kindness.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

Yes, I think self-love is the hardest and most noble pursuit we can undertake. We are all reflections of greater works, or at least that's my belief, but we seem to revel in the things that tarnish us. A quick example: I got excommunicated from bunco for being unrelatable and that was in part because I wouldn't talk negatively about my other friends. Sometimes, it's a lonely road to live in pursuit of higher relationships but it's also the only one worth traveling because at the end of the day, it's not our friends and family who help determine our next path, it's us.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It spoke to me of the need for self-reflection and finding a pathway towards enlightenment and love.


*StarStruck* Glows:

The purpose behind this piece inspires me to want to know myself and keep the path close to my univeral truth: love, light and kindness illuminate us in a dark and deeply terrifying existence.



*Vine1* Grows:

I would describe the settings more since we can't see it like in italics before the scene starts. It's always easier to immerse myself in stories that give vivid descriptions the scenes. It also helps me to understand time and characters.



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