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Second Chances  [13+]
Finding redemption in a second chance.
by 💙 Carly
Review of Second Chances  
Review by Cadie Laine
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello, This was a great piece. You wrote to the prompt very well. The description matched the story well. The message was well written and the story moved along seamlessly.
The characters were realistic and details about the characters were enough to see what they were doing. I did not see what the characters looked like as there were not enough details to make out faces. Whether that was deliberate or just part of word count restrictions is up to you.
The narrative pulled me in from the beginning to the end. I wanted to find out what was going to happen although I was curious about what he had done to have to have a second chance. This piece was easy to read through.
The setting was not complete but that also may have been a word count issue. Where were they when he sang his song, at school, a business, a home.
The descriptions of the actions performed in the story were enough to keep me reading. I wanted to know more about what was going on and where everything was taking place.
This is a great piece. It could use a little more detail and description. Thank you for writing and keep writing.
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