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 A Red Shiny Button  [E]
An offering for Daily Flash Fiction evoking this mother's memory of a curious son.
by SandraLynn Team Florent!
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, SandraLynn Team Florent! ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your portfolio for WDC Game of Thrones war when the title of your story caught my attention. The short description gave the impression to the reader that this might be based on a true event but I am not sure and that is I why I thought of asking in the review here. In the genres, the Contest entry is good but other than that, you should add Children's and Family in it as well because this is a story about family and is perfect for children.

Flash fictions fascinate me a lot, I think the main reason is how a complete story with a beginning, a middle and an ending is written within such a small word count. I haven't written a lot of flash fictions, in fact I have written only two, but I enjoy reading them just like I enjoyed reading yours. You have perfectly captured the 'curious' side of children and depicted it in a very funny way! Kids are like that and that is why I really like spending time with them! They do such funny things, go in search of small things and do the normal routine things as if they are on a secret crusade or a journey, being curious about everything around them. The small adventure of your kid and how he was acting made me laugh and relate to many kids I have seen. You have written it in such a good way that the reader actually feels like of worried as to what happened after he pressed the red button and was glad to see only the escalator stopped and nothing bad happened. Phew! *Laugh* I had just one suggestion for you work.

==> and he was too young to leave alone at home.
and he was too young to be left alone at home.

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