Hello Ali . How are you doing? Welcome to WDC! I'm Charlie. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope this review finds you well.


Title/General Thoughts/Subject Matter: As writers, we all have people who inspire us and they can inspire us in both good and bad ways. Sometimes, we might write something that's more sad and that can also be inspired by someone else. In this poem, the message is positive and a delight to read. It sounds like this person has been a good light in your life and I hope they continue to inspire you with your writing!

What Worked: This was a sweet poem and I think the person who you wrote it about would be happy to hear the positive way they have impacted your life. It was a pleasure to read because the message was so nice and lighthearted. I think you did a good job of showing the way this person has inspired you and made you who you are.


Technical Issues/Suggestions: I think there are a couple things you could do to improve this poem. These are just suggestions, so take and leave them as you wish:

In the first two lines:

Everyday I think of my problems,
I think of you.

The use of "I think" twice so close together read a bit strange. Is there another way you could describe one of these so that it doesn't use "I think"? Also, when saying that you think of your problems every day and think of that person, it almost sounds like that person is the cause of your problems rather than a solution.

I would suggest working on your word usage so that your language is more poetic. Ideally, you don't want to say straightforward, full sentences. Think of ways to say things that involve imagery and inspire the reader as well as this person has inspired you. I suggest this piece on poetic devices   for information on some of the more basic types of poetry techniques. It might help out a little bit!

Final Thoughts: Overall, I think this is a good idea for a poem and the base/subject matter is strong. The main issue is that the poem is so straightforward, blatantly stated, and simply written. I think adding some of those poetic techniques would help this poem reach its full potential. Thanks again for sharing with us and keep writing!!


Best wishes,





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