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Catherine  [ASR]
Some people speak and make no sense what so ever. Catherine doesn’t speak at all.
by Robin's Stories
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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WakeUpAndLive

Hi Robin's Stories , I found your writing ad random. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit. *Delight*

This is a very nice little tale about your job and meet with Catherine, a young girl bound to a wheel chair. I liked your writing style, the story was well paced, a swift and easy read. Very well written.

What works for me?
Catherine doesn’t speak at all. But she makes a lot of sense with different gestures of her tiny, constricted body. If her Mom serves her up a spoonful of something that she doesn’t like, the arms start a flailing, rejected morsels are drooled out and she angrily backhands them to the floor. To express her excitement as I neared her table, her permanently extended body would start flopping in her chair, her skinny legs kicked out of control, and she’d extend her right arm towards me, the palm of her frail hand always facing down.

A very good description of how Catherine communicates.

Suggestions?
There is not much to change, spelling and grammar seems to be okay. There is one thing you could help your potential readers with: could you space out the text? It is now one big blog of words. The story will benefit with the occasional blank line where it is due.

All in all a very nice story, thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive

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