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 The Righteous Hand  [ASR]
The supernatural tales of Lazarus Grey
by Sciwriter
Review by Starling
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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A CHAPTER ONE REVIEW
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The opinions contained in this review are subjective, with intent to be honest and helpful.
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Greetings sciwriter

I am reviewing "The Righteous Hand"  today as part of the "The Chapter One Competition." .
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Title and Author:

In the interest of clarity, I will be using the following conventions in my review:
Your Words: Bold Black{}
My Impressions as I read: Bold Green
Editing Suggestions:Bold Red

Plot::
Lazarus Grey is a demon hunter. He is sent to different spots to hunt and destroy various types of demons. The main one in this chapter is Rafan, a demon in the upper crust of the Devils lair. He is tricked, but ends up figuring out how to beat the demon and destroy it anyway.

Hook:
You start out with a good hook and give it a solid punch with the second paragraph.

Opening Sentence and Paragraph:
The first paragraph is excellent. It makes you want to read more to find out what is really happening. You want to find out who "I" is and why the demon is there.

Characters Development:

Lazarus Grey - demon hunter
Rafan - demon


Dialogue:
I had no trouble understanding who was talking by just the words they used.

Punctuation and Structure:
I did not mark any of what I would consider spelling errors because I know you are from the UK.


Closing Statement
I enjoyed this piece. You haven't described Grey in any great detail, but I am picturing him as sort of an older Indiana Jones type character. Normally I don't read horror stories, because they tend to have a lot of blood and guts to them. You have been able to present fear and bravery against that fear without falling into a gory trap. Thank you for submitting.

Starling

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