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Sea Goddess Poem  [ASR]
Poem about the Goddess of the Sea. Maybe there is one.
by Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox
Review of Sea Goddess Poem  
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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Overall Impression
This is my first opportunity to review your poem. I wonder if prose would be more appropriate for this piece. It tells a story, and is not structured or fashioned like a poem.

A few thoughts
Oh, Princess Megan Rose, how desperately we need a sea goddess, although I fear it's already too late for our polluted ocean. It was almost painful to read and think about the wondrous happenings here. Surely any goddess would have long since abandoned her home.

I found some unique phrasing, a bit unlikely to be mentioning bee's knees and soft cats in a water-themed work. I'm guessing not many understand your approach, and your decision to leave this as 'review only' was a smart one. I often choose the same because some of my stories are unusual, and I don't expect everyone to appreciate them. Well, actually, I don't have any expectations.

Stanza four was my favorite. The impression of a caring being allowing nature to rule, yet still protects her sea is charming. The third line in that stanza is priceless. I love the bit of alliteration and the sound/rhythm I hear when reading the words. It all flows so naturally.

Lasting Impression
I liked the reference to the Titanic, and the thought that she witnessed the event. But what could she have done for ignorant humans? I wonder if she wept at the captain's foolhardiness?

I enjoyed sinking into the romantic image your words brought to life. Keep on writing. *Smile*



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