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One Busy Night in Chicago  [18+]
1930's Chicago,-- Back Street Private Detective, a Girl and a Gangster
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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A nice mix of the daring and dry humour associated with detective stories.

Could do with some tightening up, especially in the roof scene with the transition from going to shoot Vinny to releasing the birds. Maybe also describing the distinctive sound a flock of birds make when they are startled into flight.


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