Hello, Jenny Leigh

What I liked

I saw that you'd entered Salloween's Newbie + Poetry contest and thought I'd take a glance.

I read this as a metaphor for acceptance of diversity in modern society, and as such very clever. I like the structure you've employed and the rhyming scheme. This is a cool piece of verse!

What might need work

The line "Watch the sword swallowed with amaze " isn't grammatically correct, but "watch him swallow swords and amaze" would be.

You rhyme the lines "Snakes, spiders, and two headed things" and "Step right up, step right in, It's time to begin" but "things" and " begin" don't rhyme. Consider: "...the show now begins."

Since you enjoy writing poetry, consider joining: "The Poet's Place "  if you haven't already.

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob



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