Hello, Hyperiongate

What I liked

Congratulations for getting this in "Short Stories Newsletter (November 30, 2016)" 

This was a wonderfully funny short story. I particularly liked how you showed the kids' behaviour through the teachers speech, such as Tommy with the stolen arm and Gomez with his missing hand.

What might need work

I thought you missed the opportunity for a nice twist at the end if they'd all been sneaking up on Miss Gladys to eat her brain.

You wrote "Gladys shook her heard" but I'm sure you meant "head".

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .