Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Invalid Item" .

First Impression: Last one for "New Merit Badge Commissioning" ...and I like the idea of this. It almost feels like an impossible task! It requires next-level thinking; every time I've tried to think of a color, along with it comes something identified specifically by said color (red fire truck, yellow taxi cab, etc.). Weaving in other senses, as well as countries, was done brilliantly.

What I Really Liked: I think you went with some obvious choices to those who have their sight, but you approached them in non-obvious ways...the intrinsic value of sage for example, or the image of "yuck" conjured up by Brussels sprouts.

Spelling And Grammar: As always, nothing of note here.

Suggestions: Just one minor one...I'm curious as to why you went with "oft" rather than "often" in the fourth part (the Brussels sprouts part). I read it with both and to me "often" felt like it had a better flow with "uneaten" in the same line, but it could just be a matter of personal preference. My only other real issue with this item is the ending...the four lines to me don't feel like they fit with the rest of the body for some reason (and maybe it's just me). You're trying to explain something visible to someone who can't see, yet you're ending the piece with something you don't understand, and on top of it you're throwing in two more colors you'd have to end up explaining to this poor guy who can't see anything! Maybe his dreams are the same shades too, but he doesn't know. So yeah, if you ever decided to revisit this piece, I'd consider reworking your ending. Just my opinion though.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed this...it's thoughtful and mostly well-intentioned and informative to someone who has no concept of color or what vision can produce. And it's always a pleasure to come across your work Andy, and poking through your port always lets me discover interesting and exceptional stuff. Thanks again for bidding on my package in Gaby's auction and for the support.

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .