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 | Roadkill  [E] Something isn't right. Daily Flash Fiction entry  |
| (4.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - A story that starts out fun with music playing, but soon turns creepy as a chain of events happen. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The big change in tone from the beginning of the story to the end. I hadn't realize that's where it was going. PLOT~ David and Emily are driving down the road, music playing, each taking turns to dose off for a few. Emily falls asleep as David is getting into his Euro music and then hits something in the road. He pulls the car over to investigate and sees a lot of blood, too much for the one animal lying dead on the road. When he realizes that something else is out there, he and Emily rush back to the car to make their escape. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Emily appears to have a kind heart, wanting to bury the dead animal. David is a fan of good music and likes it playing on road trips. When he gets out of the car to see what he's hit, he is shocked by all of the blood and knows something is amiss. He went from shock to fear in an instant upon realizing something else is out there. His fear showed well as he grabbed for Emily and rushed back to the car. DIALOG~ Dialog worked to push the story forward and show what both of your main characters were doing and their reactions. Nice job with your prompt.   
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