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 Character development  [E]
Meeting my new character wasn't as great as you would think. Here's our 1st conversation.
by T.L. Darling
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Aloha, T.L. Darling!
This is pretty good. Dialogue doesn't come easy for some folks, but you did good nice job with this, especially considering it's only a one-way conversation with that voice in your head.
Or is it? *Smirk2*
One thing I love about writing stories is that I get to make everything up, including the characters and who/what they are. Call me a masochist, but I like having ultimate power over them; I can cut their arms off, or make them rich or poor, or kill them off any time I feel like it! They're completely in my control since I'm the creator!
Do I have a 'God' complex from this? Yeah, I guess you could say that.
Sorry, I digress.
I like how this unnamed character is speaking to you. That in itself gives you an idea of who he/she is. But what I really enjoyed was that line about possibly changing your mind 1/2 way through the story and deciding to me 'he' a 'she', or vice versa! And the way the character reacts when this question is posed is typical and hilarious! Does that mean they might become a transgender character somewhere down the line? *Rolling*
Good job, T.L.!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was fun to read, and I hope to see back here soon! But until then...

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