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 Mother you deserve my love   [E]
Love of a mother is enough for the child.....
by Cf bose
Review by Mina~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi!

It's been a pleasure to review your story "Mother you deserve my love "  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" 

First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

*BurstP* FIRST IMPRESSION: Good start. I like this gratitude poem and the concept as well. You draw a picture of someone who play a significant role in our life. I am now reviewing it and I do hope you find something that is interesting and helpful to you.

*BurstP* THE POEM: A mother's love for her child is like nothing else in the world . She loves us unconditionally and never expect anything in return. You start beautifully “I was planted in you like a seed “ yes it is very true. Our tiny life grew in her umbilical cord. Her love is incomparable. You truly said in your line “You bought all the finest cloth, accessories” I Like the images you have painted.

*BurstP* SUGGESTIONS: I saw a few mistakes however. In the third stanza you used the line " You bought all the finest cloth,accessories " I think you need a space after comma. I think you need to capitalize "I" because it is a pronoun.

*BurstP* CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ryan”. You crafted him so beautifully.

*BurstP* FINAL THOUGHT: Nicely put your feelings into words.

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