The Last Journey - Chapter One  (13+) The final journey for one is but the beginning for the other, upon this hill they stand. #2155337 by Daniel Costa

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{Hi I'm Mary Ann MCPhedran, and thank you for sharing with me.
First expression I like the author style of writing, how he can keep the story going and not
giving any of the details of the ending away.

the author continues on telling the story and displaying the descripted surrounding. He describes several contents and brings in the five senses, the wind upon his face and the colours around his story. My favourite line, the stars beginning to awake and the orange sun set reaching out to the sky.

The author leads you to thinking that he is just telling the story of the character on a walk that he frequently goes and smacks you in the eye with the ending, I had no idea this was coming. A great twist to the finish.
About 200 words.



I found no distractions Of grammar or spelling but I'm not a professional proof reader ad I would advise you to check before publishing.

Overall a great write with descripted expression. I have no suggestion to change, imagery excellent and blends with the storyline. Keep writing A job well done .

Mary Ann MCPhedran.

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