A very interesting and unique poem. I like the rhythm of your poem too; it's a little different but it is cool.

The plot of your poem interests me. The characters are believable. Yes, the dialog flows naturally for me with your poem.

The time, place and other setting characteristics worked together for me with your poem.

I liked "So the cold, skinny finger of death might just linger around my door if I'm not strong. And it might just tickle my cheek if it's fickle -- or my spine -- at which point, to Hell, I'd belong." most.

I liked "My knees give out when I think about the night of that fateful fire. My spirit killed, the Devil thrilled, I prepared for my funeral pyre." least because it sound like a bad experience.

"Without her, I'm lost -- the cold and the frost pierce me down deep to my soul. My eternal chagrin comes from deep within. I fear I will never be whole." stands out for me.

There is nothing I would change within the writing of your poem.

The writing of your poem is memorable because this poem is based on your own story.

Many Blessings, Sharmelle



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