Hello Angus,

Holy cow! You had my heart racing by the end of this wicked horror story. Fantastic twist at the end. I did not see that coming at all.

You crafted a great short yet scary story that held my complete attention from beginning to end (my heart is still beating fast!). If you haven't yet entered it in the Twisted Tales Contest I think you should! I think you'd win.

Your pacing was great. Even though the beginning wasn't exciting, it still kept me interested and reading without pause. You really brought that end scene to life.

I have no suggestions for improvement because I didn't see any errors of any kind and the story is great as is.

Thank you for sharing your story!

Once again, I'm super glad you're featured as a port raid recipient in the Angel Review Forum and look forward to reading more of your stories.

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler


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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .