Wow! I love the philosophical tone of this piece of free style poetry. The theme is evocative and I enjoyed how you weave through interesting thoughts to the conclusion, reflected in the title. I like the idea.

I noticed a typo "universl" missing an "a". I like the imagery of the "ring of the universal bell".

The voice of the universal "we" is consistent and the use of query and pondering works well. It was easy to follow the flow coherently. I was a bit distracted by the ALL CAPITALS, which is not a usual useage.

You need a comma after we in "AS WE, THE SMALL THINGS". The use of bits of inner punctuation helped with the read. I wondered about the noun "things" here. You use it quite a bit...was is meant to be non specific and to indicate our smallness compared to the vast universe?

Thanks for sharing your thoughtful reflective poem and allowing me to comment. Keep on writing and enjoy the party this week.

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