I was drawn to to the title as I have friends who are avid gardners and back home we had a huge garden for vegetables. It is an activity of love and persistence and so relevant as a theme!

Your short paragraph is easy to follow as you detail the process of gardening from start to finish is a summative fashion. I liked the beginning line with its information and the indtroduction of a true gardner in the next line. I would like to have seen perhaps more detail and yet you have given the total picture.

The only little glitch for me was changing the voice, pronoun. You begin with third person in the first two lines. Then say WE and then YOU. The first and second "You" work but where you say "what you have sown" should be "what we have sown" in keeping the the "we" who are the gardeners. and the you is the reader who can come pick. For the same reason "your heart" should be "our" heart as it is "we" who are gardening.

I enjoyed the vision of the bountiful harvest at the end of the work! It takes me back home to when we, as kids, all had tasks to do in the garden and harvest...but wow, great eats!!

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft at WDC! Keep on writing and reviewing too.

You responded to this review 09/03/2018 @ 6:30pm EDT

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