Just doing some reviews at random and came across this poem.

First impression: While poetry (and other writing) should stand alone, it is good to explain where this came from; it helps in understanding that this is an early effort.

Opening: An introductory stanza that sets the stage for what comes next.

Ending: Wraps everything up and makes promises for the future.

Suggestions: I don't really have any; it's clear that this is a finished work from the past and is meant as a snapshot of what the author was thinking and feeling at that time. While it's not polished, as noted in the intro, it's a good thing to remember what we've written before.

If I were to critique it as a newer piece, I'd say something about the scansion and the occasional forced rhyme, but honestly, for the most part, it's exceptional for what it is.

Overall: As a longtime reader and sometime writer of science fiction and fantasy, this reminded me of my own younger self's flights of imagination. Keep up the good work, and never stop improving!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .