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First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
The poem tells a story of traveler. I like the simplicity of this poem and the way you displayed life. I like the rhyming. I like the metaphor and images you have used here. You sketched beautifully the forms and stages of our emotions.
I like the last stanza
“he held them till the end.. till his soul flew from his broken body
until he flew to her.. to a dream where he never had to wake.. again..”

I like the rhyming. The tone is filled with melancholy but soothing to the ear.

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