INTRODUCTION

Hello Christianna ,

I found your item "When I Get to the End"  in the review request thread and thought I'd review it for Poetry Month.

Before I start, I just want to say that I empathize so much with your motivation to write this piece. It must have been incredibly hard to write, and share, but I hope that it brought you some sense of peace as well. I hope that my review helps in some small way, even if it's just knowing another person was moved by your words.

WHAT I LIKED:

Good Tone

For a piece this somber, it didn't come across as mopey or depressing. You did a beautiful job balancing true heartache and loss with an uplifting, positive tone that didn't drag the reader down too much. That's the best sort of approach to a poem like this I think, and you handled it so well.

Genuine Emotion

I put this point second because it ties into the note I wanted to end this section of the review with, but the first thing I noticed about the piece was how filled with sincere emotion it was. I really felt your sorrow in writing it, and was impressed. Feelings are one of the most important parts of a poem in my opinion and you got them down perfectly.

Final Stanza

The last stanza of your poem actually made me tear up a bit.

I think anyone who has lost a pet that they got so close to can empathize with what you wrote, and reading it back I thought back to some of the best animal friends I've lost in my life. It was like picking at an old wound in the sweetest, most heart-wrenching way.




Sad (The Opening Stanza)

If there was one point where the poem struck me to be weaker, it was in the last line of your opening stanza. "Sad" is an easy word to rhyme, but retroactively it rang a little hollow in that it just didn't seem as deep as the rest of the sorrow you were describing.

CONCLUSION:

Aside from that one, small, nitpicky detail, I thought the piece was perfectly executed. Playing with the opening stanza could make the piece stand out more, but as is I was still blown away by this. I hope the review helped a little, and I am wishing you all the best.

Sincerely,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .