INTRODUCTION

Hello Spencer James ,

I found your poem "Autumn Morning" , also in the review request thread and thought I'd drop in with my thoughts on it as well before the end of Poetry Month.

So, let's get right in.

WHAT I LIKED:

Imagery

I use the phrase "painting a picture" a lot in reviews (especially poetry reviews) but this time I really did feel like you were painting a picture. The imagery was very clear and I had such an easy time visualizing the scene you were depicting in my head.

(Also, yay coffee! I automatically like any poem that reminds me to get myself some coffee )


Structure

The way that you broke the stanzas up into these short lines that were just fractions of moments, made each word feel like just a tiny bit of a scene. In keeping with the painting simile, each line read like a brushstroke.

The piece had an interesting flow because of this, and read smoothly.

(Also, because I can't help myself, yay cat! )




Connection

If I had one suggestion for the piece, it would be that you consider adding just a tad more exposition or a single line of emotion for the narrator. I felt connected to the scene in some ways (and there was a bit of a personal connection as well because of my love of coffee and cats) but I would have liked more. This feels like a private moment shared between narrator and audience, and it would have been nice just to strengthen that bond a bit more.

CONCLUSION:

As a scene/moment, the poem is executed wonderfully. As a poem, I felt there was a little missing - but I did fall easily into the scene which speaks to your skill as a poet.

I hope that this was helpful, and that I get the chance to read more of your work somewhere down the line.

All the best,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .