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 College Is a Fun Hell  [E]
College is different for everyone, here is a piece on how I see it.
by Mel
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi, Mel (Melissa)!
This isn’t bad for your first piece on WdC. It’s not often I see someone post one of their college essays one here.
You’ve done a good job of stating your reasons why college sucks, but at least you finished by giving the other side of the story.
I didn’t go to college right after high school, but about 10 years later. By that time I had the partying way of life out my system, but that’s not to say I didn’t envy the younger generation who still had it in their blood. And I also didn’t live on campus, which probably has a lot to do with what you’re observing and possibly experiencing. I’m sure the ‘Animal House’ way of life is still there (I’m 53 now), which is only go to add to the stress if you’re a serious student intent on a degree.
But whether you’re a part of that or not, there’s definitely stress!
Which is why I have a hard time believing anybody would claim it would be ‘stress free’. Your point about ‘endless nights filled with homework’, not to mention trying to keep your grades up and skipping one class over another because one might not be as important as the other is enough to drive anybody crazy!
I don’t know how well you did on this essay, but it looks pretty good to me. And your title, ‘College a Fun Hell’ says it all.
A few niggles (sorry, I’m a grammar and spelling Nazi):
‘Everyone has experienced it(,) and if you haven't(,) then well props to you.’
‘...why worry about the exam you have this Friday’ (Friday)
‘...a whole bottle of Smirnoff Vodka(,)am I right ladies and gentleman?’ (that comma should be a question mark it and the two phrases should be two separate sentences)
There’s a few grammar niggles in here too, but I think if you went back over this you could spot them. Oh, and you might want to double space the paragraphs and use a larger font to make it easier to read.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Mel, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you’re going to love it here!
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