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Greetings, a112yearoldman!
First off, I don't believe you're a 112. But I'm 54, and some days I feel LIKE I'm 112! *Laugh*
Anyway, I thought this was pretty good. I'm no expert on poetry, but the words rhymed perfectly, and the meter seemed to be constant. But it was the subject that made this shine!
The difference between light and dark is about as big as night and day, and I don't mean that in a dumb way. Some of those lines you used were golden, such as
'Close to darkness when it rears, eclipsing all what waits
Sliding faithfully in slow built tears, slowly closing all the gates'
I've always thought of day and night (light and dark) constantly battling one another to see which one would be the ultimate victor. Science tells us that one day darkness will rule, which only makes sense. Sadly, I guess it was here first, so it'll also be here last.
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, 112yearoldman, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write (and in your portfolio intro you said you did!), then you're going to love it here!
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