Greetings, JC!

Welcome to this wondrous writing community. I saw your goals posted on the Community Newsfeed and wanted to offer a few observations in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support.

You are certainly off to a great start by posting your first item for review during your first week among us.

TITLE:

Unless your name is Stephen King, or that of some other famous author, whose reputation is enough to attract a fawning audience, the title is one of the most important elements of any composition. It sets the tone and prepares the random reader for what is to come. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author.

The cryptic reference in this title piques that browser's curiosity and lures him into the realm of your wicked imagination.

OPENING HOOK:

The first sentence takes the curiosity sparked by the title to the next level.

CHARACTERS:

Although there are no physical characteristics presented to help the reader project an image upon the screen of his imagination, your narrator paints a clear picture of who this person is by using the pigments of detailed action and reflection.

PLOT:

Yes, it takes a weird imagination to pit a judge against a story and let the story win, but you have done just that in grand fashion.

NARRATIVE:

The irony oozing throughout this little tale, reinforced by a healthy dose of hyperbole, keeps your audience fully engaged from beginning to the frothing end.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

This was a thoroughly entertaining episode that reflects what actually happens in this community behind the scenes. Thank you for sharing!

Let the creativity flow from your soul!
Dave
"The Poet's Place " 

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .