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 Two for tea.  [E]
A man falls horribly ill after a cup of tea.
by Kass
Review of Two for tea.  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Kass!
Wow. This is pretty dark for your first piece on here, but you did an excellent job of writing it, especially for using so few words (I know you had a word limit). And as a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror on here "SCREAMS!!!" , I thoroughly enjoyed it! *Smirk2*
Your descriptions of what your poor clueless victim is going through were nice and vivid, as was the description of your satisfaction of watching this dude take his last breath!
Kinda freaky, but like I said, I love dark pieces!
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot one tiny niggle (sorry to be so picky, but grammar's a pet peeve of mine!):
"...on your way here(.)" I said nonchalantly...' (should be a comma)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Kass, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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