Hi Phil,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of panic and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how the man in the story will get out of the dilemma he finds himself in. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who finds out he has lost all of his money while visiting Paris. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the man who is visiting Paris, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.