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Hi there, Hullabaloo22!
For a short FF piece, this is interesting. The odd thing is that this could actually be a true story if it weren’t for that free money mysteriously raining down from the sky (although when I was a kid there was car dealer who did a promotion by dropping $1,000 from a helicopter).
But at least you managed to get all the prompt words in.
A couple of tiny niggles (sorry to be so picky):
‘the brush of a tiny ha(n)d against his pocket’
‘The first to grab a note(,) got to keep it.’ (don’t need that comma)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Hullabaloo. Thanks for sharing, and have a wonderful day!

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