Hi Ry,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with an attack and shooting. The reader is wondering why this incident has occurred. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main character and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the main character, Amy, and she comes across as a real person. Great job.