Hello IceSkatingSugarCube ! I'm reviewing Halloween--Luc Bat from Pretty Ugly Words  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review on my own personal interpretation of your work. Please, do not feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

First off, I have to admit I was excited to read your poem because I am quite intimidated by this form for "Invalid Item" . I have been staring at a blank page for a few days now and reading your poem has given me some encouragement!

That being said, Bravo! You did a wonderful job of incorporating the sense of both Fall and Halloween into this difficult poem. I also love that you added the black and orange Fall/Halloween color scheme to add to the sense of the season.

Conventions:

You stuck to the requirements of the Luc Bat form like a champ and managed to mix in the rhyme scheme without making it so blatantly obvious that it was difficult to read. As a matter of fact, all of the rhyming components flowed smoothly, were flawless, and practically unnoticeable. If I hadn't been looking for them to see your technique, I'm not sure I would've even been able to put my finger on what worked so well with this poem for this form.

Suggestions:

Meh, no real suggestions, just something to throw out there to be a naggy nit-pick:

Centering this poem would be aesthetically pleasing in my opinion, especially with the contrast in colors. It would appear to be "FALLing" down the page.

Told you it as a nit-pick, seriously it doesn't matter, just a suggestion to make a suggestion.



Favorite Parts:

As funny as it may sound, "vampire tooth" was my favorite part. I don't know why, because it's kind of thrown in there willy nilly for syllable count reasons. It's not a completely smooth transition from "donned in capes" to describe the visual of the kids in costume but it really worked and popped for me because of this hard contrast.

It really made it more poetic and fun.


Additional Comments:

Simply a wonderful job creating this Fall-fantastic and fun poem with such a difficult form to tackle.

I wish you the best of luck in "Invalid Item"  and in all of your endeavors for "I Write in 2019" .

Keep On Writing!

"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 
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