Hello! I found your story on at Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful.


- Overall Impression:
I like the way you did colors and it really looks good. I have to do that sometime and make some of the poetry blue because of my son who has Autism.

- Hook:
The first time, I started reading it, it hooked me in to your poem and it made me realize, you are retired and enjoying your time with your wife.

- Style and Voice:
I like the way it flows and you got the style and the voice for this poem. It's a perfect one I've read so far from your work.


- Scene/Setting:
I can picture seeing you and your wife walking your furry kids and being at a park walking around. Dogs do need exercise so I can understand that as well.


- Characters:
I know the only characters are in the poem are your wife and you plus your furry kids and your kids plus grandkids in the poem.


- Dialog:
The dialogue is great and I hope you keep going.


- Grammar and Mechanics:
You have good grammar o I don't see any problems with that.

- Suggestions:
I don't have a suggestions but I do know, I like your work and keep on writing and keep up the good work what you have been doing. You just need to relax and get a journal and start writing them down. Don't be shy!



Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!


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