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I Write In 2019   [13+]
Lots of creative pursuits in 2019.
by 💙 Carly
         Review for entry/chapter: "Specters Rise" 
Review by Cubby
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A boo-ghost for reviewing.

Greetings, 💙 Carly ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" . *Smile* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

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*Ghost* Goodies *Jackolantern*
         *Candy6* First of all, I love the picture! It really sets the mood! *Bigsmile*
         *Candy5* I love the chanty-meter! I could almost feel and visualize the specters marching amid the graves.
         *Candy8* Awesome imagery!
         *Candy7* Your consistent with no use of punctuation (other than at the end of each stanza,) which worked well with this piece.

*Ghost* Boo-boos*Wind*
         *Tack* You were also consistent by only capping the beginning of each stanza, except in the first stanza, you capped the beginning of the fourth line, too. Sends all inside to escape the blight.
         *Tack* Most of your stanzas flowed pretty well, though I stumbled through Lines 3 and 4 in Stanza 2 and also Line 3 in Stanza 3. I read through these stanzas several times over, making sure of this. So if you could shave off a few syllables to keep that chant-like meter going, this would be amazing! That said, it's pretty close to amazing, anyway. *Wink*

*Ghost* Chillin' & Thrillin'*Moon*
         *Wolf* My favorite lines... (oh, such a tough choice! *Facepalm*)
                             Specters fade in light of day
                             the sun burns off their right to stay

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Love, love, love this! *Smile*

*Cat* Have a great day and...*Cat2*
*Jackolantern*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Jackolantern*

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