Hi, IceSkatingSugarCube !

          Overall +/- :
My thoughts on the piece as a whole...

         Hello! I'm here to read and review your work as a fellow participant in "I Write." I'm a sucker for things about cats (I say, as my own eats from her bowl beside me), and this was a fun read. You definitely created a fun, whimsical image with this poem. A bit of confusion prevented me from engaging fully with the poem, but I enjoyed the image.

          Rhythm & Flow:
Whether freeverse or tightly-structured formal poetry, flow is paramount.

         You followed the rules of the Tableau form perfectly, and the poem flows well. I encountered one minor bump in flow when I hit the word "Frolic," which was capitalized despite being in the middle of a sentence, where other mid-sentence lines broken by enjambment are not capitalized.

          Language & Word Choice:
Because poetry is one of the briefer art forms, every word matters.

         I did enjoy the image of "frolicking" cats, though! What a fun verb! The words "whimsy" and "pearls" create such a fun atmosphere, too—something both light-hearted and sophisticated. I enjoy the image of a "windowed moon," too. I wasn't entirely sure, at first, what to make of it, but I settled on the assumption that it's the moon seen through a window, as if captured inside. No matter what it refers to, it's a pleasure to read.

         The last two lines confused me. I am not sure why these cats and the window are next to the front door. I started to wonder if maybe it was a statue or a painting or a photomanipulation framed by the front door. The first lines made me think of actual cats frolicking by a window, but the last two lines reframed the poem in a way I wasn't entirely sure how to interpret. Still, it made for a fun image, and it was an image, in accordance with the guidelines for the form.

          Things I liked :
Sometimes phrases or lines jump off the page.

cats,
dressed in pearls and gowns
Frolic — a fascinating image

a windowed moon. — A lovely and unexpected bit of language.

          Suggestions:
Take them with a grain of salt.

Because I don't know exactly in what way this image exists "beside [your] front door," I don't know what to suggest for clarity, but if there's any way to make the nature of this image a bit clearer, it might help readers form a clearer image in their minds.

          In Closing:
Any final thoughts...

         I enjoyed this short poem (and its sophisticated feline subjects!) Thank you for sharing.

Write On!



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