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Frustration  [E]
Writing isnt always easy when you are trapped in your mind.
by latentlove
Review of Frustration  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Latenlove!
For your 1st piece on here, this is pretty good. Granted it's a bit sad (I read your port intro and saw that you tend to write about depressing and sad things), but I like the way you wrote this. I don't know much about poetry, mainly because I don't understand it most of the time, but I can see what you're talking about here.
I can relate to you're being 'enslaved by mind' comment, as well as the one about words not coming easy for you. But if they don't, you shouldn't think of it as 'torment'. Writer's Block is a very real illness, killing thousands of writers each day (*Laugh* I'm kidding, of course). Seriously though, WB is something we all have as writers, some more than others. But having been writing for so long, I've noticed that the more you try to force the words on the page, the harder it becomes. Yes, sometimes they do flow from the mind, but not often. We need inspiration and a clear mind to bring our stories to life!
Don't let those words get muddled, and don't think you're trapped behind walls. Take you time, and just start out slowly.
Here's something that works for me sometimes if you're really suffering. Try writing a story backwards. In other words, start with the ending and then work from the beginning to get to it.
And as for this particular piece, I think you wrote it perfectly. You said exactly what you felt, and it was easy to understand! And I love the similes and metaphors you used! That alone is a sign of good writing!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Latenlove, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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