Hello Spring in my Sox ,

Congratulations completing the June portion of the current Promptly Poetry Challenge mini-challenge!

I popped over to your portfolio's folder for this challenge to see if there was something I wanted to review and this poem of yours caught my eye.

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed your poem. I don't think I ever connected losing a hat with losing a heart before so you definitely had an interesting and new take on such an event.

MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:
Your poem flows nicely and evoked curious feelings in me as I read it.

I am glad you only lost your hat and retained your heart. Though of course, losing your heart to the right person is a beautiful thing.

I remember thinking that Sally J Whatling (used to run/hopefully will run again, the PersonITfication Contest, Tweet Me a Story and more) would like how you personified the hat near the end of the poem.

I liked your creativity.

I liked how you structured your poem.

I didn't notice any mistakes of any kind in your poem.

I do have two little suggestions to make your poem just a bit easier on future readers... if you're interested in constructive criticism, read on. If not, just know that I enjoyed your poem and stop here. Okay, you're brave! I get that you made the title based on the challenge prompt, but suspect that anyone not in the challenge would be perplexed, even with the five words listed at the bottom.

So, suggestion one is to change the title to something more about the poem itself than the prompt. And suggestion two is to add something near the list of five words to explain what they're there for. Even something as simple as "Prompt words: hole, hat, heart, hollow, heard" would make it easier for future readers. Of course, this is just my personal opinion. Please feel free to use the ideas if you like them and ignore them if you don't.


CONCLUSION:
You wrote an interesting poem with a clever twist.

Thank you for sharing your creative writing with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .