Hi Mr. Midnight , I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits.

On Title/Subject
Another good title that fits its content. Indeed spy stuff. Loved this chapter. Again.

General impressions
Very good read. Dialogs superb, flow and pace excellent. Interesting encounter with shop owner Jeb. Great character, I could visualize him in that shop.

Favorite Parts
Jeb pushed open a sturdy looking, green, metallic door and realigned some boxes that were stacked against the wall as he went in, to keep them from falling over. The narrow passage gave way to a more open area after about fifteen feet. There was a large, matte gray, metal desk with a bunch of different types of radio equipment stacked on top of each other. A couple of very old microphones and headsets lay about besides a handful of ashtrays, all filled with a mountain of cigarette butts. The walls were lined with maps and newspaper clippings. Some of them had tacks and red strings leading from one point to another. There were also large sections of the wall taken up by white and blackboards with tons upon tons of what looked like random strings of numbers written on them. Dates were sprinkled about above some of them.

Great work. (underlined words are changed for the better).

Suggestions
* IDK? CB? explain
* PDAs, it's plural so without the mark.
* Hey, what's with the blackboards... add a comma
* I will, Jeb... add a comma
* Damn ...I'll need to [...] cut-off run for the day --- in Italics as they are Peter's thoughts.
* amateur move
* "Oh, my f***ing pen" ...add a comma
* what's with the A at the end of the story (twice)
* "Dammit, Jeb [...] nightmare to I don't know --- lose the comma

Final thoughts
Another great chapter full of new characters, places, and actions. Real-life stuff. As if the reader is standing with Peter in that shop. Very well done!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .