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 | Little story by Charlotte Hollowell  [E] A story written by a 10 year old girl who needs much inspiration and encouragement.  |
| (4.5)  Greetings, ozhan! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on the Auto-rewards page. When you asked for reviews for the 10 year old child who wrote this story, how could I resist?  So this review is for her... First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  I loved the names you chose: Ms. Snotty & Mr. Rude and Ms. Gold and Mr. Silver. Great choices, especially for people who aren't so nice.  I liked how you placed the two main characters (Conney & Ojan) in two very different parts of the world. Since neither Connie or Ojan were happy with the two not-so-nice people they lived with, they both ran away. And what a great ending! They ran into each other and became the best of friends for the rest of their lives! I love happy endings!Suggestions to Consider Paragraph 1: far often land --> far off land Final Thoughts What a great story coming from a 10 year old! I have a book that used to be blank that my grandmother gave me when I was 10. It's filled with short stories and illustrations and I still have it and that was 54 years ago! I hope you keep on writing, too! I wish you the best of luck!  Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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