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Review of The Yearnin'  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Casey, I am reviewing this today as a judge for "The Writer's Cramp.

Writer's Cramp Prompt: Howard Carpendale had a great hit in Germany with a song with the following title: Hello Again.
Use it as your title, and start the second paragraph of your story with it. (bold for tomorrow's judge) For poets: You have to use it as your title and as start of your poem.


*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand

Did the words flow naturally? Your rhyme, meter, choice of words, all worked well throughout this entire piece!

Is there anything I would change within the writing? Not a thing! *Smile*

What did I like most? What stood out?

*Star* It's hard to pick what I liked most, though I did enjoy green peas whisper to the thirsty corn and The train weeps, sweeping past old Walt's disease. I also thoroughly enjoy the entire second stanza with Walt at the Miller Cave Cafe` thinking about leaving his red clay bumpkin life as he drains his beer. I could just keep going with all that I enjoyed in this beautifully written poem! *Smile*

*Smile* By the way, congratulations on your first place tie. I was certain the other person would win until your item popped up shortly before the contest ended. There's no way I could pick between the two. Awesome writing! Take care...


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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