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 Love’s Desire - Soul’s Redemption  [E]
Can’t be annoying but can’t be something I’m not - a free verse poem.
by Tim Chiu
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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The description line says it all. You barely need to write a poem, except for exposition on the subject. I get this feeling, feeling bottled up by other people's reaction to me and yet having to bend over backwards somehow to appease them so I am worthy enough to be in our ranks. Now, let's see what the poem is about.

Wow, is about all I can say. It's like someone took an imagery gun and loaded it with some of the biggest words and aimlessly painted the wall with so many expressions, it's mind boggling. Rather than try to dissect and interpret the poem, I have a suggestion. A free verse poem is most successful when it is singular in metaphorical relations, subject and/or theme.

It's good to hook readers with smaller clues to key us in slowly and lead us along. There is like four or five poems worth of multi-syllablic adjectives and nouns here making it difficult to plod along these lines to appreciate the poet's true intent. I remain a fan of the description line and support that vision.

Brian

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