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 Three Types of Poetry  [E]
"Rising Stars" class assignment.
by Anna Marie Carlson
Review by Dave
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello again, Anna!

I am back to offer more comments in conjunction with the "Writing Poetry" assignment at the "Rising Stars Summer Camp" .

Haiku

Your poem captures the ah-ha moment of emotional revelation for which the Haiku tradition is noted.

Technically, the last line is a syllable short from that prescribed, but those criteria are often adjusted based on the differences in language.

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Acrostic:

The "Open doors" metaphor is a great way to begin the poem because it provides something with which your readers can easily connect.

Later references to abstract concepts, such as "Realizations" and "individualism," reopen that door to allow your audience to drift away. I believe you could strengthen that bond by SHOWING your readers something specific to demonstrate that "individualism."

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Cinquain

In addition to conforming with the prescribed structure, your narrator's application of the Onomatopoeia technique ( https://literarydevices.net/a-huge-list-of-onomatopoeia-examples/ ) brings the scene to life, just as the form's creator Adelaide Crapsey would have done with her original imagistic tendencies: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/cinquain.html .

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Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue on your journey. Write on!

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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