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Greetings, Penelope!

Welcome to the realm of writing inspiration. You are certainly off to a great start by populating your port and finding your way around to various activities on this vast site. I saw your introduction on the "Noticing Newbies"  and wanted to offer a few comments, as you requested. Of course, they are nothing more than one person's opinion, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

The title of a poem is like the marquee on a theater. If there is nothing to spark some interest, the prospective reader is probably not going to enter. The sign on this door reflects the overwhelming inducement that anyone involved in this process understands very well.

The sign on this door brings memories of the old Grimm Brothers fairy tale to enchant anyone who dares to enter.

FORM & STRUCTURE:

The consistent pattern of quatrains (four-line stanzas) helps to control the pace, and sharpens the focus on each action, so the reader can absorb each one more completely before moving along to the next.

NARRATIVE:

This imaginative twist on the original story brought a smile to my face.

POETIC TECHNIQUE:

Just as the conductor of a symphony orchestra controls the tempo and power of the music with a delicate nuance, a poet guides the pace and force of the poem by manipulating sounds through word selection and arrangement.

The consistent pattern of rhyming every other line helps to generate a pleasant rhythm.

Sonic texturing is another one of the filaments in the web of qualities integral to enhancing specific effect in poetry. We do not need to understand the words in order to perceive the joy in an infant's babbling. During a conversation, we can identify emotions through the inflections and tone of a speaker's voice, but the poet must make the reader hear a voice which is not audible. Your narrator's description of "a rambling, babbling brook" brings the scene to life on the screen of your reader's imagination.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Creative writers explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and share them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to evoke some spiritual reaction from your audience--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others. This was a thoroughly entertaining interlude. Thank you for sharing!

If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting with a few like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place "  group.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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