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The Day I saw Purple Clouds  [E]
A short quick story I wrote up as a writing exercise.
by DayleeCoffee
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Daylee Coffee, I just finished reading "The Day I saw Purple Clouds." I kept trying to imagine or think if I had ever seen a purple cloud (I am an avid cloud watcher) and could not remember a time. Then I read your entire piece and reached the ending, and my thoughts were no longer on whether I had ever seen a purple cloud but how God answers each of us in His own special way and in a way right for each of us.

I totally related to how you felt looking up and seeing a purple cloud. Some many years ago, one of my favorite uncles died, and while the ceremony was going on in the cemetery, I looked up and saw a cloud perfectly shaped as a heart, directly over our funeral party. Thank God I was in the right frame of mind to take out my camera and take a picture of it while all heads were bowed. My thought at that very moment was God showing me that my uncle had loved me too and that my uncle knew how much I loved him. What a magical moment.

Thank you for sharing. I will continue looking skyward, for who knows, I too may one day see a purple cloud and think of you.

Why I read your piece? It was featured in the Spiritual Newsletter.
What I liked? How your story built up and crescented at the end with the good news about your sister's healing.
Recommendation(s): Maybe run a grammar check (Note: I am NOT the grammar expert, but I use Grammarly, which helps.)
Personal thoughts: Nicely done, and I definitely related to the ending.

Thank you for writing this piece.

Write on! WRITE ON.

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