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 Lasting   [E]
Take a walk to find a familiar place where shadows never fade.
by emrldtrtle
Review of Lasting  
Review by Past Member 'rupali'
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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The content was perfect for an ideal Flash Fiction. The beginning is good, too. After reading line number one, I mentally prepare for a beautiful Flash Fiction. But, from the third stanza, the pace of the story gradually becomes slower and slower. That tendency continues in the next stanza, too. From the fifth stanza, the pace improved a bit but can not reach the beginning speed.
We know that the pace is a big factor in Flash Fiction. We can not compromise with the speed of the story.
If you feel uneasy in the execution of a part, first, omit the part and read that story again. If you are unsatisfied, rewrite that omitted part in another style but do not repeat the same. Patience is the key to success.
Keep writing. Go ahead.

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