Hi Gus, Your poem Cycle of Sorrow is on the Review Requested List and I am here to share my thoughts.

First Impression: The title is intriguing and I believe it would draw the casual reader. But the poem as presented on the page looks like a strung-out list, and is not attractive, in my opinion.

The Frame: This isn't Free Verse in fact it is written in a very distinct nonce form. Since you seem to be welcoming of other's ideas, I hope you don't mind my showing you how I see your poem.

Today, and tomorrow
We gather in fields
To express, our distaste
For the world we must wield.

Today, and tomorrow
We fill those same fields
To pretend, now that we're here
The horrors will yield.

Today, and tomorrow
No one fills the fields
And as they lay there, barren
The world never heals.

Today, there's no tomorrow
We're simply too old
So now, we tell the young ones
That they must be bold.

Today, not tomorrow
We gather in the field
To express our sorrow
For the world they must heal.

This is a poem written in 5 quatrains with a L1 repeated as a refrain in the first line of each ensuing stanza. Rhyme scheme Abxb Abxb Abxb Acxc Abxb. A being the refrain (which in S4 and S5 has a slight alteration.) x being unrhymed. No apparent metric or syllabic pattern.

The poem when read out loud has a nice rhythm. The imagery is abstract and a little difficult to connect to emotionally.

This is all just one person's opinion, it your poem use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

All in all, great first poem.

~~Tink

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .